Hi, saw your post about your chromium paper and was about to post my reply right when you deleted the question. Anyway, here's my answer.
I haven't read your entire paper, but reading that conclusion, the only sentences that _don't_ feel like new information are the first and the last one. The rest of it looks like new information. The following is definitely new information:
> Chromium is used in the process of electroplating, **which is the process of** [...]. If an element has this property, then it becomes more durable and lasts for a longer period of time. This is **because**, when a metal rusts, oxygen chemically bonds with the outermost layer of the metal, and, when the rust is removed, so is a layer of the metal. Eventually, the metal will wear down to nothing.
You're not supposed to explain new concepts in a conclusion, you sum up the paper and reach some sort of a conclusion.
> Overall, chromium is an essential element that the world would be severely hindered without.
This is a conclusion, but without evidence. Why is chromium so important? Merely because of electroplating, a concept you explained in the last paragraph of your paper _about_ chromium?
That should hopefully give you some pointers, but I recommend you read on Wikipedia what a conclusion is supposed to include.
Hi, saw your post about your chromium paper and was about to post my reply right when you deleted the question. Anyway, here's my answer.
ReplyDeleteI haven't read your entire paper, but reading that conclusion, the only sentences that _don't_ feel like new information are the first and the last one. The rest of it looks like new information. The following is definitely new information:
> Chromium is used in the process of electroplating, **which is the process of** [...]. If an element has this property, then it becomes more durable and lasts for a longer period of time. This is **because**, when a metal rusts, oxygen chemically bonds with the outermost layer of the metal, and, when the rust is removed, so is a layer of the metal. Eventually, the metal will wear down to nothing.
You're not supposed to explain new concepts in a conclusion, you sum up the paper and reach some sort of a conclusion.
> Overall, chromium is an essential element that the world would be severely hindered without.
This is a conclusion, but without evidence. Why is chromium so important? Merely because of electroplating, a concept you explained in the last paragraph of your paper _about_ chromium?
That should hopefully give you some pointers, but I recommend you read on Wikipedia what a conclusion is supposed to include.